Living In The Past
Sun streaked through the trees,
The bluest blues were playing,
Picked up a telephone,
Heard voice after 118 days....
Drifted down the rabbit hole,
Met a dreamer, a younger me,
He grinned foolishly and wrote poems,
Trying not to lose his gaze...
"I see you standing,
Brown leaves falling around,
Raindrops in your hair,
Smiling at the ground;
Star of my life,
Get lost in my sea,
Come close and whisper,
Your little dreams to me."
She hung up the phone,
Dying dead-tone made me,
Spin back through the ages,
Forgetting the days of youth....
Now she jokes my story
To absolute strangers, and I
Pull the brown ruffled curtains
Keeping out the truth....
The bluest blues were playing,
Picked up a telephone,
Heard voice after 118 days....
Drifted down the rabbit hole,
Met a dreamer, a younger me,
He grinned foolishly and wrote poems,
Trying not to lose his gaze...
"I see you standing,
Brown leaves falling around,
Raindrops in your hair,
Smiling at the ground;
Star of my life,
Get lost in my sea,
Come close and whisper,
Your little dreams to me."
She hung up the phone,
Dying dead-tone made me,
Spin back through the ages,
Forgetting the days of youth....
Now she jokes my story
To absolute strangers, and I
Pull the brown ruffled curtains
Keeping out the truth....
posted by Ravi Handa at 7/05/2004 02:58:00 PM
20 Comments:
handa its your poem?....amazing man
Yes dude.. It is mine... thanks..
handa ... mustansir here .. can u download sopranos last 2 episodes (512,513) ..?
also, check out the reviews for O.C. .. worth downloading ??
thanks :)
That was awesome!!
Mustu, writing a mail would hve been easier for you.
Schrodinger, Awesome eh ?? No one has used "AWESOME" after the 80s... chill dude.. thankz or as you would like it, "its kool, my brother" ;-)
Aap shayer tho nahi...magar..rrr... aapne likkhi wonderful shayeree, ki hum bhi hum bhi bane shayer! Ghatiya hi sahi!
Handa... GET OVER IT. It has been a long time.
Hi Ravi: very nice poem, very interesting blog. Cheers.
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Hey man amazing poem that, I got your link through someone. I am coming to Kharagpur to do my MBA in School of Management, IIT KGP :) Starting 28th July
Hey Ravi thanks for your wishes:)
and I dude, life is long journey and perhaps you will get more oppurtunities and did it hurt??
And man you people do make the best use of internet at KGP... do they allow outsiders to use the hostel...lol!!
Adios
CC
Cheap way of publicity: Do drop in at my blog
http://justmeandmyblog.blogdrive.com
LOL:P
*opportunities
CC
ThinKing,Salwater Thanks..
Anonymous, What the hell do you know what I am talking about? GET OVER IT? I have never been UNDER it.. Mind your own business or have the guts to leave your name...
Drumster, Good to know that you are coming to KGP. I live in Nehru. Drop in for a drink if you like.
CC, you are always welcome in our hostel ;) As far as net is concerned, I am more of a net-addict now. I feel uneasy if I dont check my mail 10 times a day. Trust me, the publicity funda works ;) I did drop in at your blog..
Awwwww that was so touching.... **hugs**
Wonderbug
Nice Poem !!!
Heeeeeeyyyy,
Mommie Buggie was here and if she liked the poem, it means I am getting good at stuff.... For those who dont kno who she is, just check out her blog The only AUNTIE that beats her in humor is Alpha. No hard feelings Buggie but Alpha is my favr8. I dont know when she will visit.
nice blog. came through some links. what a poem!
keep up the good work. ;-)
must say.. this is an amazing poem.. n hey, thanks for dropping by at my blog..:)
must say.. this is an amazing poem.. n hey, thanks for dropping by at my blog..:) - smilingricha
Hey people,
Am i the only one who has noticed that 75 % of comments on this post are by females? this genrally doesnt happen to my blog rather this never happens to my blog and i cant even imagine something like this happening in my life. is my virtual personality getting better? (NO ONE IS ALLOWED TO ANSWER THIS QUESTION)
neways thanks Richa and Anupama...
and hey Cheesy Chopstix, you are the second CC to visit my blog... btw, i do write poetry sometimes but mostly its in Urdu/hindi. frankly speaking i dint get the part where you said something about the contrast in last couple of stanzas.. If you are mentioning about the Rhyming pattern, here goes my funda :
In the first and the third para the rhyming pattern is of 4-4 nature ie. repeating after 4 lines but in the second para its of 2-2 nature. The reason for that is, I wanted to show that I have written the second para as a YOUNGER ME ( who was naive, stupid and foolishly in love) and now, I have grown up as a person and hence the poet in me has also grown up to the 4-4 level instead of the dorkish 2-2 level. That doesnt mean that I am not stupid anymore, as a matter of fact some people say that i have become even more stupid.
I hope that i made myself clear. I hope that the pacific is as blue as it is in my dreams. i hope... (shit, i have to stop watching Shawshank redemption over n over again)
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